Click on the link, read the story and make a comment. Remember what we talked about in class. We want to be better students and we do this by being more active. Write a comment, check the answer and make another comment so that there at least 3 comments between you and your teacher.
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McFeeglebee's Pond
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HI Mr. Phil... I read the story and it was great! I like the part when the catfish turned into a shark and the shark turned into a whale and finally it turned into a sea dragon! I also think that this story has a moral... The moral is : IF there's a sign that says STAY OUT! or DON'T GO IN! or DANGER ALERTS YOU!.. Then just do what the sign says, other wise you will regret what you have done...
But it was a great and interesting story.....
Judith 3D
mr phill the story was great , really great i like the part when the boy went fishing and the cat fish turned into a shark then the sark turned into a whale then a dragon but its a dream and you still have to read signs and read the rules example : keep out !, danger !, no fishing , and no running1. so thats why we have to read the rules be a thinker be smart that you have to choose the right thing or the bad thing ha ha ha ha ha !
by Angela 3A
I like †he story because it's
funny and how can a little tiny
goldfish turn into a giant
cat fish then to a shark then ยช
whale ?????
☁
Ciao
Gaby 3A
Mr. I think its a dazzle story( very interesting,impressive and exciting)
Because its like a lesson for us...
The lesson is: We must follow the rules that we have.. Because if we don't follow the rules we will be not safe...
Angela 3D
Judith, Once again you have done well and you show that you are learning the skills of commentary.
I have one suggestion. I think there is a small, but important error in the last line. it concerns the word "was".
Can you fix it ans say why?
Phil
Angela, I really like the idea that the story is a dream. That's a great idea.
And you have picked on the idea that we have rules for a purpose.
Phil
Gaby, It is a good story I agree. But the whole idea for everybody as students is to make comments and not ask questions - that's my job.
Phil
Mr. Phil,it was a great story because first he got a catfish, suddenly the catfish became a shark,suddenly the shark became a whale finally the whale became a sea dragon but it's only a dream and its only a little goldfish .But there is a moral.....the moral is...if there is a sign so we have to do what the sign says.So we dont got bad things and it was a good story.
:)
Glenn 3A
The story was great. First he ignored the sign and he just did the wrong thing. He was fishing and, suddenly he caught a shark instead of a catfish then it turned into a whale then finally it turned into a sea dragon.
it was a great story! :)
Natalie 3A
I read the story. It's great. I like it when the catfish turn to a shark, whale then finally a sea monster. It's amazing, but impossible.
CORIN 3A
Mr. Phil have you answered mine yet because I can't check it sometimes!?!?! :(
Natalie 3A
I like †he story because it's
funny and how can a little tiny
goldfish turn into a giant
cat fish then to a shark .
Tata 3A
Mr. PHIL all the story is about a boy are not listen he still go to fishing and he got a whale monster and shark Ilike Until there
VABIO 3A
Mr.phil I think the story is weird the gold fish turn bigger until it became a sea monster.
jason 3A#
Mr.Phil I read the story It was so interesting. I like the shark, and when he was dreaming about a Catfish tur into a Shark, Whale, than Sea dragon it was so interesting that it teach me a lesson=
LISTEN TO THE RULES OF WHAT THE OWNER OF THE PLACE SAY SO,
OR SOMETHING BAD WILL HAPPEN TO YOU!!!!!!!
BRI@N 3A
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Hi Mr.Phil I read the story already and it is a nice story. But how can a cat fish turned into a shark the shark turned to sea dragon then he woke up. it is a nice story. I think he is so dangerous because he wanted to go to the pond. But the moral is DON'T BE TO DANGEROUS WITH WHAT YOU DO!!!
Sydney Tanoe
3A
THANKS FOR ANSWERING OUR COMMENT
GRADE 3
MR.PHIL PLEASE REPLY, I AM WAITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I read the story Mr.phil,I think the story is trying to say that if you don't play by the rules you will pay the consequences.
Nathan 3a
STILL WAITING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!JASON 3a!!!!!!!!!:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(:(
Yay..
Angela 3d
Mr.Phil are you sleeping!!!!i am waiting for your answer!!!!!
Glenn3A
Means don't steal something that's belong to somebody
Peter 3A
Means don't steal something that's belong to somebody
Peter 3A
Angela 3D,
This is a good comment. Yes, rules are for a good reason.
Phil
Yes, Glenn, it is all just a dream. Do you think the writer is clever?
Phil
Natalie, It is indeed a great story. Should we say"is" or should we say "was"?
Why?
Phil
Corin, Why is it impossible?
Phil
Sorry Natalie, I've been busy tonight. This the first chance that I've had to answer.
Phil
Tata, well, why don't you tell me how one fish can turn into another.
Phil
But Vabio, what sort of story is it? What do we learn from it?
Phil
Jason, Come on! You're a bright kid. How does it all happen? And what is the moral?
Phil
Brian, It is a fascinating story. It's a good yarn. And you have picked up the moral. Have you taken the time to read some of the other kids' comments?
Phil
Hahahahaha!!! Sleeping! UMm EEEeeeeeeeeEERRRR I'm afraid to say that I have beeen snoozing.
Phil
Sydney, Yes it's a good story. But you ask how can it happen, but that's your job to tell me, isn't it?
Phil
Nathan, I'm sure you've got a "joki" there - but you're right, it is telling us that rules are there for a reason.
Phil
Peter, I think you're right here.
Phil
Hey! There are still a lot of kids sleeping out there. I'm not the only one! heheheheheehe
Phil
That Marcel is a sleeper, Nadya is a snorer, Rafael is another, Joji, cracks the ceiling when he sleeps, Natania is always asleep.
What about Sherline, Shania, Hubert Tubby Jason, Martin, Winson, Kenneth, Darrell,Nicky, Shannon, Anthonny, Arif. Waduh! Sleeping all of them!
Come on guys!
Phil
Yo Mr Phil,
This was one very cool story. The story is about not doing trespassing to someone's property, because you don't know what will happen to you. So if there is a sign that says : NO FISHING!, then just don't do fishing there. It is about following the rule.
Anyway, the story is cool.
By.Raphael 3A
Yo Mr. Phil,
I am still waiting for your comment.
But my mom rush me to go to bed now.
Sorry that I have to go now...
Actually, I am afraid that you'll get angry to me.
But I am already very sleepy.
Again, I am so sorry that I am not waiting for you.
Good night Mr. Phil.
By : Raphael 3A
Mr. Phil.
I am not another.
I only have to finish the other Home Work,
then having dinner with my family.
But i did post my comment about the story...
By : Raphael 3A
Mr. Phil the writer is quite clever.
Glenn 3A
Good night Mr.Phil.
Glenn 3A
Rafael, Cool huh? Yeah, I agree with you. Waht is the main feature of the story? I maen. how does it work?
Phil
Rafael, It's a good thing you didn't wait up too long because I went to sleep long before you did. So, I've answered this morning.
Phil
Yeah, Glenn. the writer is clever. He or she (I can't remember) wrote the story as adream.
PHIL
Mr Phil the story is cool because the whale turned into a sea dragon.
Winson 3D
The story is nice And i like the part when the fish became a shark then whale and so on.
Marcel 3A
Wow,that was a great story.That was the best story I ever heard that a catfish turn into shark and then the shark turn into a whale what a nice story Mr.Phil.
William 3D
Winson, what makes the story work?
Phil
Marcel, More please, more!!!
What about the writer? What is his technique to keep the reader interested or entertained?
Phil
William, it's a nice story. We can say that in Grade 2, but you are almost in Grade 4 , so you should be able to say more.
How does the author make the story work?
Phil
Arif, I thought you said that you had already done the HW?
Well, it's not here, is it?
Phil
wow what a great story it tells us to follow rules or signes cause if we didnt we will be in trouble and we will have things bad because we didnt follow rules or read signs and I thing the author want to tell us about it cause its a important thing and without it we will be in a big trouble
nick
Mr. Phil this was totally awesome when the whale turn into a dragon and when there is a sign says NO FISHING ! then don't do it sometimes when you are trespassing then you fall a sleep you will a nightmare just like in the story well it was a good story.
By.Raphael 3A
i don't get it .................... ur job is 2 b a teacher right ? so .................... ?
gaby 3a
oh ok ill do it next time !!!!!
so at least 24 comments from each student ?
gaby 3a
Gaby, My job is to encourage explanation. It is easy to say it's a nice story and stuff like that. You repeat the story, but you should try and say something more important. We are looking for your ideas.
Like this - If you think the story is good, try and say why.What makes this story work?
What do you think of the writing style or the author?
If you give your ideas, then teachers will know that you are a good student because you have ideas and you can think for yourself.
Does that make sense to you now?
Phil
The story is very nice. I like the sea dragon part because I like dragons. Good thing that it was a dream or not Goegie P.John will be dead. But there's only a goldfish
Priska
3D
Gaby, no we are looking for around 3 for each person, like a conversation, a sharing of ideas.
Certainly not 24 each.
Phil
Priska, Ah, he was lucky that it was only a dream, wasn't he.
Good comment.
Phil
Yes Nick, it is a great story. Why do you think that?
Phil
well i have a lot of imaginations but sometimes i follow someones thing ha ha ha so lets see our report ha ha ha he he he hu hu hu ho ho ho hi hi hi..................
ha hi hu he ho
Who wrote the last comment?
Phil
Good heavens the story was fantastic
mr.Phil first a cat fish then a great white shark then a hump back
whale and a giant merine dragon.
I think the moral is:if someone says don't go there don't go there
or you will be sory.
KENNETH
3D
Kenneth, I agree that people have rules for good reasons.
What do you think about the way the author has written the story?
Phil
Hey Mr.Phil,the story was funny.My most favorite part is when the large catfish turned into a shark,the shark turened into a whale,and it turned into a sea dragon!The moral is that you have to follow the rule.And of course follow the classroom rule.Hahahahahaha!
Mr.Phil I forgot my name it's up there.
Shania Ie 3D
Whose comment is that at 6:17 ?
Phil
Ok Shania, Hey, just check the idea "it was a good (or something) story.
Is "was" correct, or should it be "is"?
OOPs, Now I've got your disease Shania!
Phil
what do you mean Mr.Phil? I have no idea!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sydney Tanoe
3A
Sydney, What I mean is, can you tell me what technique or skill the writer has used to get the shark to turn into a whale?
And is the writer clever?
I think that YOU are clever enough to tell me. That's what I want all students to be able to do before you move on to Year 4 in July.
Have you got the idea now?
Phil
Because it's just a dream, MR. PHIL
cORIN
It's funny because the catfish become the shark.I think the shark eat the catfish.
Martin 3D
It's soooo weird the fish becames into a shark, a whale!, sea dragon, but it was just the dream of that boy.If I be Mr.Bla bla bla I could send those army's to guard that pond.But that boys just dreaming!!!.
Hubert
Corin, Exactly, It's just a dream. Isn't that a good idea to make a story work?
Phil
Martin, It looks like you re-read the story. What makes the story good?
Phil
Exactly, Hubert! It's all just a dream! Why do you think the boy dreamed like this?
Phil
HI Mr. Phil,your right,,, I should of said But it IS a great story.. not WAS... :)
Judith 3D
Kia Ora
Hi, Mr. Phil...I read the story, and I'm confused, why from a small goldfish, it became a big shark, then,when the shark splash it's tail, it became a whale, then, it became a sea dragon... I think, it was a silly story..................
Ka kite Ano
Claudia 3D
I read the story and it was interesting. I like the part when the catfish turned into a shark then a whale then a sea dragon!But suddenly,the boy woke up and it was just a dream.But the real fish he caught is just a goldfish.This story has a moral,the moral is If there is a sign that says STAY AWAY! or DANGER ALLERTS YOU,then just do what the sign told you,or you'll regret what you've done.But this is still a really important and interesting story Mr.Phil!!!!!
ha ha ha !!!
By Sherline 3D
hahaha just as i acpected ok, the moral is if you see anything that tries to keep you away from danger, do not be mad about it or ignore it you just folow it if it makes sense, if it don't, think for your self.
jason 3A
Mr.Phil, why George thought that the fish turned into a catfish, a shark, a whale and finally it turned into a sea dragon but it was all a dream the one he caught is only a goldfish so George released the fish and go away but its a nice story and amazing.
Darrell 3D
Judith, Now you're really getting the hang of things.
Phil
Perhaps it is silly , Claudia. But hang on a minute, has the author written it in such a way that it isn't so silly if you think about it?
Phil
Sherline,
You do it every week! It does have a good moral and it is important.
Do you think the writer has used a good technique to tell the story?
Phil
Jason, I think I understand what you talking about. Is the author clever?
Phil
Yeah, Darrell remember that we have been talking about dreams for the last two days. EEErrrr maybe not just talking, but you have been expressing your dreams in crayon and paint and the good thing about that is that in dreams there are no rules really, but in real life there are and usually for good reasons.
That's what George dreamed about and should have learned about.
Phil
Phil
Mr. Phil,
Sometimes we have to listen to somebody advice, but the decision is ours.
Peter 3A
Peter, That's a good comment. Why is it that we don't listen to good advice sometimes or don't bother to read signs warning of danger and things like that? It's kind of weird, right?
Phil
Still no comments from Madeline, Megan, Nadia, Anthonny, Joji, Shannon and of course, Natania.
Not much time left now.
Phil
WOW! it was a cool dream, or not. Why that catfish can turned into a shark, whale, and sea dragon!
If the story is real and the sea dragons attacks Jakarta, I would blame him.
Maybe it is because there is a catfish that can turned into some terrible things.
And maybe the one who owns the pool also get in trouble like him.
DENNIS 3D
Hi Mr.Phil,I have read the comment and it was a interesting story. The part that I like is when the catfish turned to shark and it turn to whale then sea dragon! When the boy wake up is just a dream. The real fish he caught is goldfish. This story has a moral that is , if there is a sign that says STAY AWAY or DANGER ALLERTS YOU, then just do what the sign told you, or you'll regret what you've done.(sorry... I have to turn off this computer because I must to)
Shannon 3D
Dennis , the author has a pretty good imagination and so have you. Thank goodness it is only a dream.
Phil
Shannon, yes it's just a dream and the fish is only a tiddly goldfish. But that's what dreams are about, right? Anything can happen in a dream.
Phil
Hi Mr.Phil, I read the story and it is great, I like the part when the catfish turn into a shark and into a whale and into a sea dragon.
I think the author have many imaganations to create a story like this.
Megan
Mr.Phil I like when the catfish become shark, sea whale and change to sea dragon.I think the author has many ideas to create the story about.I'm sorry mr. Phil i'am sorry because I comment to you late.
I'm sorry I forget to put the name
Tata 3A
HI Mr. Phil... I read the story and it was great! I like the part when the catfish turned into a shark and the shark turned into a whale and finally it turned into a sea dragon! I also think that this story has a moral... The moral is : IF there's a sign that says STAY OUT! or DON'T GO IN! or DANGER ALERTS YOU!.. Then just do what the sign says, other wise you will regret what you have done...
But it was a great and interesting story.....
NADIA
Mr.Phil I don't know his technique to make the reader interested
Marcel 3A
Megan, Yes, I think the author is very imaginative too.Try and use the word "imaginative next time.
Phil
Well Marcel, Look at it like this. if the author hadn't decided to tell the story as a dream, would it have worked?
That the good thing about dreams - there are no rules, and so a catfish can turn into a shark.
Phil
Nadia, First lesson - try and use the word "is" rather than "was" when you tell what you think of a story. Remember we talked about that in class this morning.
I agree with you about the need to take notice of signs.
Phil
Tata,
You don't need to apologize for being late. i am pleased that you have written a comment and it's a good one too. I like the idea about the author being clever, because I think he or she has been very clever indeed.
Now you only have one more comment to make and that will be 3 between us.
Phil
yess he can make the story came to life and make it not lame
Who wrote the last comment?
Is it yours Tata?
Phil
Alright, but I think Imagination and imaganative is almost the same.
Megan
Yes, you're correct Megan, they are almost the same, you just use them in different ways.
That's why I encourage you to
say ,"The author is very imaginative."
You are too.
Good night,
Phil
No i don't think it will work if the author didn't decided to make the story a dream.
Marcel 3A
Marcel, I think you can see that this story has been well planned.
So we can learn from that too.
Phil
This story is interesting because the kid drea the shark turned into a whale than a sea dragon. I think the moral of the story is when you see a sign or some one tell you something, you have to obey or else something bad can happen to you :)
By Patric
Yes Patric, We have rules for reasons. What about this one though - is the writer creative? What's your answer?
Phil
Still no aaaaanswers from the 3 - you know who they are- "A" for Anthonny, "J" for Joji, and "N" for Natania.
P.
The story was exciting. The author is so creative, he/she wrote that story to useyour brain before you act !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Natania 3D
The story is great it is very fascinating the author is a very unique author he tries to tell us to think before you act or if not it will you'll get a very bad punishment.And the catfish it turned into a shark and the shark turned into a whale and the whale turned into a sea draagon and suddenly little Georgie woke up cause it was only a dream and dreams can make things that can't happen seem real.
Joji 3D
Natania, I love it. I really love it! What a simple but great comment. Question- "Do we say "was' exciting, ot "is" exciting.
Phil
Exactly Joji! Exactly! the author is indeed very clever, because the only way the story work is to make it into a dream and dreams have no rules.
Phil
The story is very cool.The boy is my favorite character because he is a naughty boy he doesn't wanted to folow the rules.The author is very clever because he made the story into a dream so that why I like the story.
arif 3a
The story works good i like that story. that story is great!
ANTHONNY 3A
i THINK THE AUTHOR WAS CLEVER . i LIKE THE STORY. THE STORY IS ABOUT A DREAM. i LIKE DREAM! !
ANTHONNY 3A
ANTHONNY, I'M GLAD YOU LIKED THE STORY.
JUST REMEMBER TO USE THE WORD "the" rather than "that" next time.
Yes, the author is clever and it is a good idea to write the story as a dream
Phil
ok mr.phil! i remember
that
anthonny 3A
The story is about a guy who dreams about fishing in McFeeglesBee's pond then, he got a catfish and the catfish turns into a shark and the turns into a whale then a sea dragon but, it turns out into a goldfish.
Madeline 3A
Madeline, I agree with you, but why didn't you tell me something about the writer?
Phil
The writer has a good imagination because she tells a dream into a story.
Madeline 3A
Exactly Madeline. You are spot on!
Phil
Arif, I have to say that your comments are excellent and you show that you really understand how the story works.
Top notch!!!!
Phil
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