Imagine that you are the mayor of your local community and somebody asks you what you do?
You answer simply and clearly in one or two sentences using the key words below.
Type your answers in COMMENTS below.
KEY WORDS:
....
Responsible for......... services..
......organization .......
needs.......
community .........................
such as.....
clean water..................housing
............fixing
streets.........................security.......
everybody
............SAFE.............happy!
Good luck. Remember, trying is the most important thing. You try first by answering as best you can, and then I'll do what I can to assist ,and together, we can do a pretty good job.
So, let's have lots of answers like we did last week!!!!!!!
Phil
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I am a mayor i'm responsible for the public service and organization of the needs of the community such as: clean water housing fixing streets maintaining security and make everybody feel safe and happy!
angela 3A
I am the mayor and responsible for running the public services and organization of the needs of the community, such as:clean water,housing,fixing streets,maintaining security in order to make everybody feel safe,happy and proud!!!
Sherline 3D
I am a mayor I am responsible for services & organizations such as : fixing streets and clean water.[excellent securities....?]
We must make everybody safe & happy!
I think it is a little bit weird?
DOESN'T IT LOOKS WEIRD?
BRIAN BRAIN bRIaN BraIn
I am a mayor and I have responsibility of sevices, services like clean water, repair street, and security. I want everybody to feel happy, safe, and proud.
Now I able to remember.
Priska 3D
I am Mayor I would be responible of the puplic services and organization.The needs of the community such as:clean water,housing,fixing streetsand maintaining the security and make everybody feel safe,proud and happy.
I am the mayor and responsible for running the public services and organization of the needs of community ,such as:clean water,housing fixing streets maintaining security in order to make everybody feel safe,happy and proud !!!!!!
Clarissa 3D
I'm the mayor,I am responsible for running public services , the needs of community organization such as: clean water, housing ,security and fixing streets.
Then everybody will be save and happy!
By Angela Stacia 3D
I am a mayor and I am responsible for running the services and organizaton of community needs such as :clean water,housing,fixing streets,and excellent securities. I want everybody to feel safe and happy.
Corin 3A
I am the mayor and I am responsible for running the community. I make sure that the public services are excellent!, Such as: clean water, housing, fixing streets and the maintaining security,in order to make people safe, happy and proud!!!!
Judith 3D
I'm the mayor i'm responsible for the services for the community such as :clean water,housing,fixing street,and security,so the community will feel save and happy.
Nicky
November 12 2008 3:43PM - who wrote this?
Phil
Angela, This is great! Just one little insy, teenie weenie thing -"I am the mayor of what?"
Phil
Sherline, This is very good. Just one thing - who taught you to use a colon(:) after "such as"?
The fact is , you don't need it just trus, trus, no funny little marks.
Phil
Brian, You have a problem with the word "the". How many mayors are you?
Also use "organization of". Then ask yourself what you are mayor of.
Also like Sherline, who said you need a colon after "such as "?
Next, you start with "I" and then you change to "We", but you are only talking about yourself. Check it.
Phil
Priska, Get your memory checked. Not "a mayor", but "the mayor", there's a big difference.
Read some of the other kids' work.
Phil
Another "no-namer"!
Oh dear, so many unfortunate nameless Year 3 kids.
So who wrote at 5:41PM?
We may never know.
Phil
Clarissa, This is too good, using fancy words. have you got a "joki" there?
You are missing at least one comma and like some of the other students, you have used a colon (:) after "such as ".
Why did you do that?
Phil
Angela Stacia, This is not too bad, but you really need to use the word"and" at the beginning and not a comma. And you've also got "penyakit colon"!
You really only need a colon for something like a list, and you are simply explaining your job.
Phil
I am mayor and I am responsible for the services and community. I make sure that the organization services such as clean water,housing, fixing , and security.I need everybody to feel
safe, happy, and proud!!!
I'm the mayor and I'm responsible for running services.I make sure
that the public service are exelent!,such as : clean water,housing,fixing and maintaining,security and make sure that everybody feel safe happy and proud.
by:Hubert 3d
Mr. Phil at the up that is mine ( Claudia)
Corin. Are you the only mayor or not?
If you are , then say "the".
Also I imagine you a "running the community", that's the job, making sure that........
Read some of the other kids' explanations.
You're close though.
Phil
Judith, I think you must live fairly close to school because you haven't shown the same level of "forgetfulness" as some of the others, but you have caught the dreaded, horrible, "penyakit : : : : : "!
Who on earth taught you that?
Check , after "excellent", take out the ! and add ..., Services such as ......Bla2 blabla, bla di da2.."
Phil
Nicky, learn the word "and"!!!
Stick it in your first line because it's very important word that allows you to use the language fluently.
Next check your spelling - do we say "save" or do we say "safe"?
Have a "tinker" with it.
Phil
Oh dear, another "no-namer" !!!!
How is this possible ????
Wrote this at 7:41PM??
Who, who, who?
Boo, hoo, hoo!!!!
Phil
I am a mayor who responsible for services, organization, needs and community such as cleaning water, housing, fixing the streets and security. I also make everybody safe and happy.
By:William 3D
Another "no-namer" at 7:42!!!
What are we breeding here?
Is it a disease?
I don't want to catch it because names are important.
And what a waste of time and effort!
Oh deary me, when will we learn such simple things, ( writer sobs, finishes another box of tissues!!!)
Waaaahhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Phil
Hubert, you're not responsible for running services only!!! No, no no!
You're the boss Hubert, big, fat,bald, but hard working. You tell other people what to do and if they don't, you get a monstrous BLACK CLOUD over your head and your workers turn into quivering "mice"!!!
The mayor runs the community Hubert. That's why he's got the bog off ice on top of that big building in Puri.
Forget using the colon (:) after "such as ". There's no need.
Phil
Claudia has just discovered her name!!!!
Crowd cheers, roars, party time!!!!!!
Now don't forget it, Claudia.
Phil
William, I think you should read my answer to Hubert's work.
Phil
We don't appear to have much work in from 3A, only Brian and Corin.
What's going on 3A????
Phil
I am the mayor and I am responsible for running public srevices and organiztions of our community such as clean water,housing,fixing,streets,and make sure that the security is excellent. Shania Ie 3D
EXTRA< EXTRA< Calling Hubert.
Bad typing from Mr. Phil
the mayor's got the BIG office at the top of the building in Puri, not "the BOG oFF ICE," no, no, no!!!
Phil
Shania, Not too bad.
Question -Do you want people to feel happy and proud in your community?
Phil
Still no news from 3D's Natania, Martin, Joji, Shannon, Kenneth,Axel, Dennis, Winson, Darrell, Jason.
Come on guys, what's the hold up?
Phil
FOUND- Ken's work some else!
But at least he did it!
Phil
I am the mayor and I am responsible for community services. I make organization that helps the needs of the people. I have many projects such as cleaning the river, fixing the water sewer, building public housing. I want everybody to feel safe and happy.
Patric 3A
Perhaps the 3A kids needed a reminder about the homework before they went home today.
Or perhaps they don't look in their Communication Books and check!!
MMmmmmmmmmmmmMMIKIIIIIIRRRRRRRRRRRR!!!
Phil
Wow Patric! This isn't too bad. Where did you get the word "sewer"?
did you swallow a dictionary?
Good to see you made it.
Phil
A Mayor,responsible for organization community needs and services,such as housing,clean water,fixing street,security.So,everybody safe and happy.
Kenneth 3D
Well, it's time for some "shut-eye".
See all you little squirrels tomorrow,
Sleep tight now.
Phil
Kenneth, Check the last sentence..."So, everybody CAN BE...."
Sleep well!
Phil
Mr. Phil is shutting dddddoooooownnnn, ZZZZzzzzz
Phuut!
Grruk! ZZZZZzzzz, Phut!
Dreams - wonder what happened to Winson, Darrel, Axel, Nat, Martin, Joji, Shannon and Dennis.
ZZZZZZzzzzzzzzz
I am a Mayor.I am responsible for public services and organization the needs of community such as clean water, housing, fixing streets and maintaining security. It makes everybody feel safe and happy.
PETER 3a
I am the mayor of our community and I responsible for running public services and organization of the community needs such as clean water,housing, fixing streets and security. I make sure that everybody feels safe and happy!!
Darrell 3D.
Peter, Apart from the beginning where you say "a mayor", I think this is very good, so good in fact, I wonder if you have got a "joki' on your keyboard.
Usually, if you are the one and only worker, you say "the" and I think that a community only needs one mayor, or one big boss, don't you think?
Ciao,
Phil
Darrell, After the first "and" in the beginning, I think there should be a chicken!!!Know what I mean?
After that, it's brilliant! Pure Einstein!
CU,
Phil
I am the mayor, and I am
responsible for organization and public services at
our community,such as:clean water,housing,street
repair. I want everybody to feel safe,happy, and proud.
Peace!!!!!!!!!
dennis 3D
Ue, Dennis, You made it! I thought you had gone to bed and forgotten everything.
Where did yu get the word "public" from?
It's good , but we have discovered some scary punctuation, the (:) colon after "such as".
Forget it Dennis, the colon there is not necessary.
And I see that you've used the word "maintenance" too, mmmmm very interesting.
Have you got a secret "joki" there?
Good stuff.
CU later,
Phil
I am the mayor and i am responsible running the community.
I make sure that organization and services are good,such as clean water,fixing streets,housing and security.
I want everybody to feel safe,proud and happy!!
Arif
I am the mayor running the public service and organization for the needs of the community,such as clean water,housing,fixing,streets,maintaining security in order to make everybody feel save,happy and proud!
I am the mayor running public service and organization for the needs of the community,such as clean water,housing,fixing,streets,maintaining security in order to make everybody feel save,happy and proud!
martin
Martin you can't spell 'safe' but you wrote 'save'
inspector Joji
Priska you wrote 'now I able to remember'
you should say three words-'now I remember'
inspector Phil
Dennis its no peace for you but WAR!!!!!!!!!
General Joji Custer
Hey Martin!Is Ms.Claudia your 'joki'?
Officer Joji
I am the mayor we are responsible for the public sercives and organitation of the community such as: clean water, housing, fixing streets, maintaining security and make everybody feel save, happy and proud.
Sydney Tanoe
3A
I am the mayor,I am responsible for the services,organization such as clean water,housing and fixing the streets for the city so,everyone will feel SAFE and happy.
Marcel 3A
I am the mayor and I am responsible for running the service and organization of community need such as clean water,housing,fixing streets,and excellent securities.I want everybody to feel safe and happy
Megan 3A
Sydney, It doesn't make sense to say "I" and then "We" as you've got in the first sentence.
It's better to say, "I am the mayor and I am responsible for..."
Also check your spelling of "save".
Should it be "save" or "safe"?
Phil
Marcel, It's very important that you understand the importance of using the word "and", because only when can use it, can you develop fluency, which is the main aim of learning the language.
Further, you mention organization, but the organization of what exactly?
Give me an answer.
Phil
Megan, this is not too bad really, but I think you have to decide what you are running, is it the organization, or is the community?
If you are running the community, you need organization and services and if these are no good, then everybody will come and knock down your door and kick you out into the street!
Check it out.
Phil
Oh yes, I forgot to tell you gys that we found today that 3D's Winson and Axel forgot to write their names last night; so that means they're thinking.
Phil
But the news of the day is the Martin took one hour this morning trying to turn on the computer, open the blog, trying to think of what to say, getting Ms. Claudia to babysit him and after all that , he forgot his name!!!!!!!!!
AAAAIIIIIIiiiiiiiieeeEEEEEEEE!!!!!
P.
I am the mayor and i am responsible for running our community.I make sure that the organization and services like clean water,street repairs,and security are exellento!!!!!!!!
I want everybody to feel safe, happy and proud!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
MADE BY: S H A N N O N 3 D
* * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * * *
Iam the mayor and iam responsible for the running services and organizations of needs of the community needs such as clean water,housing,fixing streets and exelent securities.I want everybody to be safe and happy. Natalie 3A
Shannon, How on earth did you remember all that!!!
Wow!
And the Spanish is "excellente".
I have a question for you.
How would know if you are a good mayor or not?
One last thing, we never say "made by" unless it's a cake or a pudding, so why don't you simply say, "By Shannon."
Easy Huh?
Phil
Natalie,
This is very good. Just check your spelling of "excellent" and look at the last sentence.
Notice how the topic is different. Then that's the time to use a new line to show that the ideas have changed.
Good effort.
Phil
The clock is ticking and still nothing from Natania 3D.
She reckons she can't get on to her the computer at home because her sister is too "galak".
Do you guys believe this story, or is it easier to believe in Mickey mouse?
Phil
I'm the mayor. I responsible for running the community. I lead organization such as giving security
as the services to the community. And I will keep the water clean. And I will be fixing the roads.
raphael 3A
Rafael, Gotcha!
Good one. You've written in your own style.
Now you really need to learn one thing "secepat mungkin" and that is you have to know how why and when to use the word "a".
if you use it in the first sentence it means you only need one sentence and it will be fluent. That's why you need to use it. Later you begin a sentence with "And". You should have carried on using "and as a conjunction (kata sambung) and suddenly your English would be brilliant. I am not JOE KING!
Do you get it? The whole idea is to keep talking, or writing, don't stop. You are close.
Phil
Now we begin to see who the inactive ones are: 3A no news from Nathan, Glenn, Madeline, Nadia, Gaby, Tata, Vabio, Jason and Anthonny!!!!!!!!!!
3D: no news from Jason and Natania.
That's 11 students. Too many.
Phil
My dear fellow citizens, as your mayor, I will be fully responsible for our community needs such as providing jobs and improving facilities such as arts centres, swimming pools and parks, plenty of clean water as well as security.
I hope you will support me.
Mayor Nathan.
Nathan, Good mayors are not supposed to be cheats! They are supposed to honest, hard-working fellows.
They would never use "jokis" to do their homework.
Resign now to avoid bad press and a lengthy stint in the city "slammer"!
Phil
i'm the mayor and i'm responsible for running the public services and organations such as clean water,housing,fixing streets and I make sure that everyone feels safe and happy!
Jason 3A
i'm the mayor and i'm responsible for running the public services and organations such as clean water,housing,fixing streets and I make sure that everyone feels safe and happy!
Jason 3A
Finally, Jason, you did something. Let's start at the beginning - with a capital letter. Check your spelling of "organization."
I think it's better to use the word "needs" and say, "I'm responsible for running the community and the organization of the needs such as,.....Bla, bal bla bla"
The rest of it, I think is good.
Phil
I forgot to mention that Tata and Jason 3D have done the work, bu they forgot to put their names, so that means that we're waiting for Madeline, Vabio, Gaby, Anthonny, Glenn, Nadia and Natania.
Phil
I am responsible for public services and organization of the needs of community . such as clean water , housing , maintaining security guards and make everybody feel safe and happy !
Gaby 3A
I am the mayor and I am responsible for running the public services and organization of the needs of this community, such as:clean water,housing,fixing streets,maintaining security, etc, of course all the needs that make everybody feel safe,happy and proud!
Anthonny 3A
Good one, Anthonny, May I suggest you check the use of "such as". Take a look at it and you'll see that you've used a colon(:). This is not necessary. So avoid it in the future.
Phil
Good shot Gaby. Note that there's no need to mention "guards" because there's a bit more to security that just guards and I would have used "making" rather that "makes" at the end.
Other than that, It's good , right?
Phil
Now we are down to five students who haven't managed the work yet. Actually, we better make that four because a tank ran over Madeline's lap top and turned it into a biscuit, so she'll do her work on one of the school computers instead.
Phil
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